Wednesday, September 19, 2012

Script v.3!

Okay so. Some major changes since the last draft. I think most of them are after page 8 so skip the beginning if you read the last version...

Super mega thanks for the help Myken! Go nuts and tear it apart again please, the comments on that last one were really really awesome.



ONE
Ree and Munk are aboard a ship, sneaking into the cargo storage area. It's heavily guarded, and they're hiding.
Ree: Stay here.
Munk: Are you kidding? There's no way you're going down there.
Shot of three soldiers walking by a door.
Munk: This is insane. There's a fuck-ton of guards on this ship and they patrol this door every five seconds. Something's weird.
Ree: Come on, we could eat for months after trading those meds to the right people.
Munk: But-
Ree is already gone.

TWO, THREE
A patrol of 3 guards walks towards the cargo hold door. Ree grabs one, knocks him out and vaults over him, knocks the second out, and jumps onto another's shoulders and strangles him until he blacks out. She drags one over to the door for identification. The door slides open with a hiss, revealing a dark room full of capsule-like structures. Ree sneaks in and the door slides shut.

FOUR
Quickly, she grabs one of the capsules and leaves, but outside the alarm is raised and guards are running from every direction. They see her, but she runs. Ree finds Munk waiting and grabs him, and they run up to the top of the ship and jump over the side, to land on their tiny beat-up ship, which drops away quickly.
Guards: Hounds! We need hounds!
Munk and Ree jet into the clouds

FIVE
Munk: Shit. Shit shit shit. Ree, why did you have to do that?! They all saw us!
Ree: Just latch us onto something quick before they launch hounds.
Munk: They'd launch hounds for this? What the hell did you take?
Ree: What does it look like I took, dumbass? They've got a room full of these kits and we only need one, I dunno why they're so worked up about it.
Munk: Okay, okay. Here's a passenger ship, grab the stickers and I'll get us below it.
They fly below the passenger ship and Ree throws a suction device onto the bottom of it and reels their tiny ship in.

SIX
Ree: It's headed towards Y-180... Like the cargo ship.
Munk: Been a while since we've been home.
Ree: Yeah, almost two years.
Munk: Two years since I found your sorry ass sitting in the grimiest port in the whole city with nowhere to go and nothin' to eat...
Ree: Oh whatever. You waiting for me to thank you? I woulda been fine.
Munk: Right. Let's see what you grabbed that's so great that they wanna set hounds on us.
They go through a small hatch into the ship

SEVEN
Ree: Looks like an egg or something.
Munk: Does it open?
Ree: It must...
Munk puts his hand on the capsule-like thing. He picks it up and pulls the ends, then tries twisting it. He turns it in his hands and then finally presses inward on both ends.
Munk: What the hell? Definitely... not a med kit...
The capsule turns transparent and inside there is a glowing sphere structure. Mega zoom in to see weird blobby particles and stuff inside.

EIGHT
Close on Ree's face, fade to white, flash of an image of a person being pulled apart into similar blob-like particles, fade back to white.

NINE
Munk: Hello? Ree?
Ree: What.
Munk: You totally zoned for a second.
Ree: I had this weird... nevermind.
Munk: Have you seen this stuff before? You know, back when you were with them?
Ree: I don't remember.
Munk: Well what do we do?
Ree: Nothing. Let's get to the Old Man and see how much this thing is worth.
Their tiny ship detaches from the larger one, and goes in a different direction. It's heading towards a relatively small floating area, bustling with ships coming in and out. Their ship heads for a port on the bottom of the structure and parks. Zoom out to reveal that a black ship is following them.

TEN
Munk and Ree leave the ship in a trashy looking alley in a place that looks like a shantytown. Very shady, buildings falling apart and built over other structures. They enter an unassuming door in one of the walls. The interior is dingy and packed with things. Ree and Munk head through to a back room.

ELEVEN
The trader is sitting in the middle of the room, tinkering with an old gun. He is surrounded by strange objects that look ancient
Ree: We've brought you something special
The trader looks up and gestures for them to come closer. We see that he has no eyes.
Ree: It's gonna cost you. I risked my life for this.
Munk: And mine.
Trader: We'll see.
He holds out his hands, and Munk gives him the capsule. The trader's face shows his shock and horror when he touches the capsule

TWELVE, THIRTEEN
Trader: (shaken) What have you done? Where did you get this?
Ree: It was on a transport ship... We thought they were med kits.
Trader: You can't feel it?
Munk: Feel what?
Trader: I haven't felt this in a long time. This substance... it could kill an entire city in the wrong hands.
The trader's face turns angry
Trader: How dare you bring this to my market! You have no idea what you've done. This could wipe out the entire place!
Ree and Munk are shocked
Munk: We've never seen anything like it... We had no idea.
Trader: Of course not, you fools.
The trader sighs, then stands, and takes a plain unmarked box from a shelf behind him
Trader: I cannot help you with this. You must leave immediately.
Ree: What? Then what do we do with this thing?
Trader: Only the Twelve can help you.
Munk: We can't give it to the police?
Trader: They know nothing. And they cannot help you.
Munk: The Guardians... No one even knows what they look like.
Trader: Take these. They're directions to The Center.
The trader hands Munk the box
Trader: Go. Now. Get out of here, there isn't much time.

FOURTEEN, FIFTEEN
Their ship leaves from the Market-city. Above, the black ship follows, and begins to descend on Ree and Munk. Cut to inside and suddenly there's a huge crash and there's a hole in the ceiling of their ship.Grapples coil down from above.
Munk: Fuck!
Ree: Goddamnit, they're coming over!
A group of soldiers descend through the hole and crash into the ship. Ree lunges at them but two grab her. Both Ree and Munk are grabbed, and the soldiers take them and the capsule thing then are reeled back onto the hound ship. Ree's eyes are half open as she is dumped onto the floor of the hound ship by one of the soldiers. Munk is out cold.

SIXTEEN
Soldier 1: These are the ones we were after?
Commander: Look at the little one. She's got the mark. And her hair's gone. That only happens in one place.
Soldier 1: But I thought they confined those to the Camp until they were ready.
Soldier 2: Yeah, I never heard of any getting outta there...
Commander: Either way. That one's dangerous. She probably doesn't even know how dangerous. I want her supervised around the clock, with multiple guards.
Soldier 1: And the other?
Commander: Doesn't look special. Toss him.
Soldier 1: Yes sir.
Soldier 1 reaches down and grabs Munk's limp figure. He goes towards the airlock and grabs the handle, opening it.

SEVENTEEN
Suddenly, Ree leaps up and dives at Soldier 2, grabbing his gun and firing at the Commander and another soldier. The Commander and the other soldier are hit and die, and Ree knocks Soldier 2 unconscious. When Ree turns around, Soldier 1 has his gun to Munk's head. Munk has come to, and is looking terrified.

EIGHTEEN, NINETEEN
Soldier 1: Drop the gun and get on your knees. Or he dies right now.
Ree drops the gun and kneels. Her eyes stay locked on Soldier 1. Soldier 1 backs up, points the gun at Ree while still holding Munk, and prepares to drop Munk out of the ship, then freezes, drops Munk, and gives a silent scream of pain. His body contorts and shakes, then starts dissolving into the same weird particles that were in the capsule thing and that Ree saw briefly, then finally drops, limp. Fade to white.

TWENTY, TWENTY-ONE
Munk is shaking Ree, who seems to have briefly lost consciousness.
Munk: Ree, wake up, goddamnit wake up!
Ree's eyes open.
Munk: What did you just do? That was the most ridiculous thing I've ever seen! It was like... I just... I don't even know! How did you do that? You didn't even touch him!
Shot of Soldier 1 lying facedown, dead.
Ree: Oh god.
Munk: Did you know how to do that this whole time?
Ree: I...
Munk: You saved me.
Ree: I'm gonna be sick.
Ree vomits, then wipes her mouth with her hand. Munk puts a hand on her shoulder.
Munk: Hey. Hey, it'll be okay.
Ree: I'm just like them. I'm what they wanted me to be.
Munk: No you're not. You did what you had to!
Ree: I tried to forget...
Munk: It's okay, Ree. We're okay. You don't have to do it again.
Ree: That thing... the thing we stole. It can do that. What I just did, only more. Worse.
Munk: What? How do you know?
Ree: I just know. I can feel it now... I can feel what the trader was talking about.
Munk: The city. They're taking it all to Y-180...
Ree nods. Munk's eyes go wide, then he stands and goes to the controls of the ship.

TWENTY-TWO
Munk takes the box given to him by the trader and inserts it into a compartment on the dasboard of the ship. On a screen, a path highlights.
Munk: I'm not completely sure how to fly one of these...
He stares at the control panel.
Ree: Just get us out of here, before more come.
Munk hesitates, then presses a button on the control panel. Wide shot of the hound ship zipping off into the distance.
Munk: Well, I guess that was it...
Ree: No shit.
Long shot of the ship shooting off into the clouds

TWENTY-THREE, TWENTY-FOUR
Wide shot of The Center- a large floating crystalline cathedral-like structure. There is one opening. The hound ship enters and flies down a long corridor. It stops in a circular chamber with one door, and lands. Ree and Munk get out, Ree is holding the capsule. The door slides open, and they walk through down another long corridor that opens into a huge central room. 12 pedestals with strange containers face inward in a semicircle. In each of the containers is a naked creature, humanoid but distorted, with strange patterning/growths/extra limbs or something, staring at them. Ree and Munk approach the center.

TWENTY-FIVE
Munk (quietly, only to Ree): These are really them?
Ree: Guardians of the United Cities, we need your help! I am Ree, and this is Munk-
Guardians: We know you, number seven zero three.
Ree: That's not my name anymore.
Guardians: And we know what you bring. What you stole.
Ree: You know? Someone's taking a whole room of it to Y-180! To the city!
Guardians: Yes. That city has become a disease.
Ree: What?
Munk: You're the guardians! The guardians of the cities! You're here to keep them safe! What's wrong with you?
Ree: You...
Guardians: The United Cities will be kept safe from the corruption of Y-180.
Munk: That's our home! You can't!
Munk's eyes roll back, and he drops to the floor.

TWENTY-SIX
Ree: Munk!
Guardians: Number seven zero three. You have been trained. You have more power than you know, and you were made to be with us, in the ranks of the Elite.
Ree: Wake up! What did you do to him?
Ree is kneeling, shaking Munk. He is still alive (maybe twitches or groans?) but is passed out
Guardians: He will live, if you join us. Seven zero three. Remember your past.
Fade to white. Shots of Ree in the white room, practicing killing with the same kind of weird globby disintegration power, various amounts of people dead against the same wall. Fade to white

TWENTY-SEVEN
Guardians: You have killed more people of Y-180 than any of us.
Ree looks sick
Guardians: You are one of us. You are an Elite.
Ree looks down at Munk
Ree: I'm so sorry.
She grabs the capsule thing and places both hands on the ends, then pulls the transparent exterior off and is holding the glowing sphere. Munk's eyes blink open.

TWENTY-EIGHT, TWENTY-NINE
The guardians begin disintegrating in the same way as the other stuff, screaming in pain as they are pulled apart bit by bit, panel borders gone or weird or full page spread. Bits of Munk begin to separate as well.

THIRTY, THIRTY-ONE
Ree and Munk are surrounded by death and destruction, bits of weird flesh and bones and gore and globs of nastiness. Ree wipes some gore off Munk's face. The other side of his face is mutilated in a melty way, as are parts of his body.

THIRTY-TWO
Ree: Hey, we still have work to do. Let's go home.
Ree carries Munk's mutilated body out of the chamber.

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